5b’s short burst writing

Here are some examples of short burst writing that we did on Friday. We based them on an example first person recount and adapted it to fit part of a recount about Mount Vesuvius erupting, which we are learning about at the moment.



After one hour of running like a maniac I could finally see the boats swaying side to side like a cradle. I noticed straight away that the azure blue sky was gone. A strong wind of ash was coming in my direction, people were screaming and running away. Eventually, I got onto the boat and the ash crept closer.  (By Priya)



After two tortuous hours of racing against time, we finally found the boats swiftly dancing  back and forth on the bouncy waves below. We. It iced straight away that a blanket of thick black smoke was escaping the mouth of the volcano. (By Allayna)




After one hour of running endlessly for my life I finally saw the boats of the port. I looked behind. I saw the lava racing down like Usain Bolt towards me head first. I thought my life was over but giving up was not my style. So I ran and ran. I made it. (By Bilal)

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