Congratulations to Eleanor who has created this fabulous build up. Look at how she uses short sentences to build suspense.
I went swirling and whirling like a tornado at unbelievable speed. I hit the ground. Silence. It was a place like I had never seen before. It was an unnatural, extraordinary, vast and marvelous place. A helicopter hovered above me. It went as fast as a cheetah. It went past some extraordinary leaves that rustled in the wonderful, whistling, wacky wind that were on trees as high as a tower. I followed the magnificent helicopter until…
Wow! Eleanor, this is an amazing piece of writing you should be very proud of your descriptions.I think miss looked in the right book.
i think that is amazing you should be on the blog better then me
Well done Eleanor that is a great build up.
Well done Eleanor you have used amazing words.