4P's Goal Scorer of the Week!

An excellent opening and build up Venita. I like how you have used questions to make the reader want to read on.

Imagine a place where there are jewels everywhere,
where waterfalls splash diamonds like rain drops from the sky. Where strange creatures come out from nowhere.This is a story of that place.
I was playing in the garden, it was a Friday afternoon and it was the hottest day ever! Suddenly I saw a flash of light come from out of nowhere. What was that I thought to myself? I edged towards it. It was an astonishing flash of light. I was so terrified that I ran into my gigantic house.

The house spun as fast as a motorbike, my brain whizzed around 3 times that I fell onto the table where my mum had left rotten eggs. Whoosh!

After a while I woke up, and I was in this terrifying petrifying place. I walked around the place there were trees as high as the sky. My heart pounded as loud as a drum in my ears! However I bravely walked on.