Dear Diary,
What a day! Mrs Ebbel is getting on my nerves. I was sitting at the back of the class, when a new boy walked through the door. Mrs Ebbel had announced that his name was Jeff Fishkin and that he came from Washington D.C. Mrs Ebbel started looking for a place for him to sit. I was really hoping that he wouldn`t sit next to me. Suddenly Mrs Ebbel said that he could sit next to me. It was the only desk available. Before he sat down Mrs Ebbel asked him if he had been to the Whitehouse before. Jeff mumbled no. Just then two girls sitting on their desks at the front shouted “No one likes sitting next to Bradley.”
Then the bell rang for recess at 10:00. Everybody rushed out to play, but I just walked slowly and sat down on the bench. That’s when Jeff came up to me and said “I don`t mind sitting next to you. I want to be your friend.” All I said was “Give me a dollar or I`ll spit on you.” So Jeff gave me a dollar and ran off. I think he got scared of me. I felt bad so I chased after him. ” Hey! Hey wait up.”You can have your dollar back only if you be my friend.”
Wow what a fantastic piece of writing. I am sooo proud of you! Well done Love Mum!xxx
Wow! A amazing piece of writing. I enjoyed reading it. Well done! 🙂
I’m really impressed too Sawaira! I really like the way you demonstrate a real understanding of the character of Bradley. Well done!
You really have got Bradley’s voice just right and I love how you use American phrases, well done.
Your work is really good, I like how you have started your diary entry!!!
WOW! That’s really good! I love your style of writing Sawaira! 🙂 🙂
This diary entry is amazing I like your ending. ” You can have your dollar back if you be my friend.” That’s a great sentence. But you left us on a cliffhanger. Please write more.
Thank You! I am really glad that you liked my diary entry and thank you for the positive
comments!
Wow sawaira, i loved your diary entry!!!111
WOW! Sawaira that is a wonderful piece of writing! You definately deserve to be a goalscorer! 🙂
Well done !!! Sawaira,I loved your amazing piece of writing! Keep it up! 🙂 🙂 🙂
Well Done I love your style of writing! : )
Sawaira, how did you get your ideas together?