World War 2 Day. Post by Shannon and Rayan

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On Thursday we dressed up as evacuees and went to the countryside. Even though it was a long nasty journey we were all still excited! When we got to the country side school the deputy head was not sure if we london kids could go in her school because our axcent was a bit slang and we were disshevelled and smelly!

We done lots of exhilerating activities and there was blitz art , making gas maskboxes ,identity card and writing informations about ww2  Also writing what happened when we where in London also using imagine openings to our stories e.g Imagine a world where the german army bombs your house in the middle of the pitch black night while you are sleeping peachefully in your bed.

Shawon's Writers Workshop

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Evacuation letter- Bismah

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Here is Bismah’s evacuation letter from Writers Workshop. To view you need to click on the link at the bottom of this post.

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