First I cautiously and slowly entered the haunted house. Suddenly the door slammed shut and slime was in my hair, as hard as a rock! I saw a ghost flying around me. I could not believe it, I almost fell on the floor. The walls smelt! Suddenly I saw Jack’s bag; I thought there was going to be a clue but quickly it vanished into thin air. Suddenly I put my hand in some goo; it was squishy and slimy. Next I decided to go upstairs even though they were moving. Suddenly I saw Jack’s hat and I heard the door open. I thought “Will I get out in time for my scrumptious tea?”
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