Goal Scorer by Eliot!

Steadily I crept;  just then I banged into a tree! “Oops” I dizzily said as I was shaking my head.  “I thought that was a dinosaur”.  So I went on …  Bang! “Not again!” Then it just moved its giant head. “AHHH!” I screamed rapidly whilst it stomped towards me.  I ran as fast as my little legs could carry me; compared to the Tyranosaurus who hardly had to move at all.   I eventually lost it but my journey wasn’t over!  So I kept going to find water. I found a giant lake where I could drink anything.  The sun was shining but then a wind storm came. 

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